I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

Ughhh! If I could I would kill the man that made school so early鈥? said Rachael as she slowly crept out of her bed to sort through her huge wardrobe. She finally decided on wearing a blue Aeropostale polo, holey jeans (with leggings of course), and plenty of accessories. Rachael got dressed brushed her teeth straightened her hair and rushed down the stairs. Three minutes until she had to leave not nearly enough time to pack her lunch, or get breakfast. Right after she groaned about having to eat the totally toxic cafeteria food her brother popped up.

鈥淲atcha doing?鈥?he asked in his sugary sweet demonic voice.

鈥淟ittle boy I do not feel like dealing with you right now. I already have to eat the crappy cafeteria food.鈥?br> 鈥淥oooh you said crap. Mommy said that鈥檚 a bad word鈥?br> 鈥淥h shut up and go get ready to leave鈥?br> Her brother hopped away to get his bags.Rachael鈥檚 little brother, MJ, always seemed to make things worse. Arguing with her brother made Rach remember about how she had promised her friend Marsha that she would bring her back her pearl necklace. Once Rachael finally got to her room and found the pearls she glanced at the clock it was already 8:01. Being a typical Kent, Rach hated being late. So she herded up her mom and little bro into the car and they were off for Richmond Middle School.

The moment Rach got to her locker she was flocked by her best friends, Danielle (Danny), Marsha, and Amanda. Her first instinct was to give Marsha her pearls.

鈥淗ere. Now stop bothering me about your jewelry.鈥?br> 鈥淗ey you know how I feel bout not having my pearls. I feel so so so naked鈥?br> 鈥淗aha thanks for the info. Really.鈥?

Rach鈥檚 other bestie Marie was already in the class. Once Rach was done getting her stuff out of her heck-hole locker she entered homeroom in her nonchalant way, that made everyone notice her. She pranced over to Marie鈥檚 desk to see what鈥檚 up, but once she got there she noticed there was something wrong.

鈥淲hat did he do now?鈥?br> 鈥淲hy do you assume that Chris has done something to me? Maybe its my fault, or maybe I鈥檓 just PMSing鈥?br> 鈥?Im sorry last time I checked I wasn鈥檛 stupid. So tell me what he did know鈥?br> 鈥淥k. What happened was as simple as this. He is messing around with this girl named Lauren. I didn鈥檛 see it but I know he did it cause I鈥檓 hearing about it from everyone. Im not talking to him and he keeps asking people why. He should know he鈥檚 not stupid鈥?br> 鈥淢arie before you go accusing him of doing that you should-鈥?br> Rachael was interrupted by the sound of the super lame morning announcements.

鈥淗ello fellow students of RMS. I鈥檓 Lacey and here are your morning announcements. The tennis team will be playing at Lakebottom tomorrow from 4:30 to 6:00, also鈥?.鈥?br> Lacey鈥檚 annoying voice slowly faded out as Rachael began to drift into day dreaming faze. As always she was day dreaming about 鈥渉im鈥? Him wasn鈥檛 just anybody him was Miguel Ramirez, the hottest guy at RMS. Well in Rachael鈥檚 mind he was. The way his hair was all curly and the way he smiled and laughed and said the craziest stuff made her melt. She had only talked to him on very few occasions. He used to like her and she liked him too, but he has a girlfriend now. How Rachael wished she could just kick her out of the picture but she couldn鈥檛. Before Rachael could finish her daydream of Miguel and her having a picnic on a sunny day the bell rang for first period. Daydream over 飦?br> Rachael couldn鈥檛 even get 15 minutes into the lesson before going off into another daydream. After coming back to reality Rachael asked herself why Cupid was so mean. Why couldn鈥檛 he have given her the hots for someone who she might possibly have a chance with. See Rachael had this little problem that no one else knew about well a select few people knew about it. Rachael was a newbie to the dating world. She had never had a boyfriend. She had never kissed a boy before. She hugged practically every boy she saw but nothing can top a kiss or the joy of having a boyfriend. Rachael鈥檚 鈥榬ents were terribly over protective of her and did everything in their power to prevent boys form getting to their daughter. Little did they know that she had called her fair share of boy and that she had over a 10 husbands (inside joke). Rachael had been almost positive that Miguel could change her problem but looks like his girlfriends got him under her thumb and isn鈥檛 letting him go anytime soon.

鈥淯hm Rachael why are you staring at Mr. Louis鈥?butt鈥?br> 鈥淥h god my b. Ewwww yuck鈥?br> Rachael had been unintentionally staring at the teachers behind for the past 5 minutes. HUGE mistake.

鈥淗ope no one else saw that. You know all the boys would have a 鈥淗aha. Your secret fascination with teacher鈥檚 butts is safe with me鈥? Marsha whispered back.

鈥淥h thanks for the support鈥?br> 鈥淎nytime鈥?br> 鈥淯hm ladies I hope your paying attention. all of this field day with that鈥? she whispered to Marsha information that we are covering will be on Fridays test鈥? said Mr.Louis in his wanna be non-pervish voice

鈥淥h yessir鈥? Marsha and Rachael both said at the same time. They were trained in the art of acting fake and sugary sweet around teachers.

The moment Rach got home and finshed her homework she signed on AIM. The internet was more than half of Rachael鈥檚 life. She couldn鈥檛 go a day without the computer. Well she could but she would be texting all the time. Rachael loved her status of being a social butterfly.

Once Rach got on AIM she immediately received an unknown IM from some dude with the screename 鈥淎llstarpro鈥?

鈥淲ow this guys gotta be full of himself鈥? Rachael talked to herself outloud. She opened the im and began chatting. She was gonna ask this dude how in the heck he got her screeename.

Allstarpro: hey

Cheerrmsaaf: uhm who is this?

Allstarpro: do you really need to know?

Cheerrmsaaf: uhm yeah this is my im and I don鈥檛 wanna be talking to a total stranger

Allstarpro: im not a total stranger u know me but u probably don鈥檛 remember me

Cheerrmsaaf: ok stalker dude ttyl

Allstarpro: wait don鈥檛 go I have put doing off for way too long I really wanna talk to u

Cheerrmsaaf: first off dude I don鈥檛 know secondly ur a stalker and thirdly why would u wanna talk to me

Allstarpro: you do know me but u might not remember im not a stalker I just really wanna talk to u and I wanna talk to u cause 鈥淚鈥?think ur amazing鈥?.

Cheerrmsaaf: me amazing u鈥檝e got the wrong Rachael honey I really gtg though its dinner time we can talk later though

Allstarpro: ok bye Rachael

Cheerrmsaaf has signed off

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

Wow! I think you have the talent to write a book, for your generation. I read a lot and since I am 67 years young I am not familiar with your lingo. My children are all grown up. But you have the knack, so I hope you stick with it. Just a thought, you need to know where the story is going, for instance, what is your message overall? Your are off to a good start.

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

okay honest opinion:

it started off good. i was pulled in by the 1st sentence but after that i started to lose interest. there were too many characters introduced and i had no idea who was saying what. maybe you should spend more time building up the characters first. i think you have a good start though =)

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

its too long to read so i didnt. but yea go ahead and write

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

do you really expect people to read all of that?

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

i didn't even read it because i hate books about rich popular people. they get annoying after the people first wake up and put on their clothes (cause of course the author describes everything they are wearing)

nobody i know reads stuff like that because when you finish reading it, it doesn't leave any sense of the fact you learned a lesson or anything. you just wish you could be a rich popular kid.

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

Needs a bit of improvement.

It looks like one of those teeny books though.

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

wow thats pretty good..email me the rest!! ;)

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

thats not the whole book rite?

im assuming its just the first chapter

good book, i'd read it =]

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

I like how u write! I think you should pursue this writing idea of yours. However if you want some constructive criticism then here goes: Unless if you're going for a chi flick kinda book, it would be a good idea to add some more interesting vocab. Otherwise, if i was reading this in a bookstore, i probably would turn the page! As long as you keep the story interesting and a page turner, then you good to go. But adding some more vocab would be good too. Good luck :)

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

i luv it! write and tell me the title when it's published!!!!!!!!

I'm attempting to write a book what do you think?

i luv it....wow its amazing and ur only 13 thats a fantastic start!!! keep writing and expressing urself....and dont care about wat other ppl think!!!!